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I wrote this after reading a fucked up Jeff the Killer X OC fanfiction in which Jeff ends up killing the OC.

So yeah.

It left me feeling kind of depressed and sad for the girl, because during the entire 'relationship' he was sadistic and cruel, and god-awfully possessive. I guess he felt some sick pleasure in knowing she breathed her last breath at his hands? Idk. It's frickin Jeff the Killer.

Here's the link to the fanfic, just in case you're feeling morbid.
calicophoenix.deviantart.com/a…

Enjoy, and please, critique as much as you want.

Much love,

chibi4evah
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I'll be frank with you about this poem. It was well written, it had its good moments (particularly in the last portions, which had such a limerick feel and an equally cold twist - irony at its most traumatising in my honest opinion). Wuth that said, the use of the rhyming in the first stanza  was decent. I had thought about whether it sounded forced or not, but because it handled the subject matter really well, I let the matter rest because in retrospect, the rhyming was effective. It handled its subject matter well, and overall orientation towards the story as a whole was good.

If taken as is though, it can be something people can relate with as well. Which is food for thouht. Well done :)